I like the new rules (along with the grammar changes that Kasper suggested) but I have to be nit picky and request one bit of clarification:
Never say, type or post material which isn't suitable for a young teenager to see or hear.
We believe that in a community (whose) main objective is to provide a safe place for (primarily LGBT) people to converse without threat of insults or harassment, we can not exclude the most vulnerable part of our community, (those) under eighteen.
As such we operate a strict PG-13 policy in all public areas of our network and all members must promise to respect that at all times.
Isn't that a little too subjective to not spell out a little bit better? Some of the jokes my teen cousins and I share would be totally inappropriate in other families. ;) But seriously, hear me out, because I actually have two good reasons:
1) The statement as written is asking admins to make a judgement call. Do you really want to field reports from an in-game grudge that someone muttered "f**k" under their breath in chat, and the hearer was offended?
In this type of situation, if you take no action and the rule's that vague, you as the admin become the bad-guy. Not your fault, though. Even Wikipedia is vague about what constitutes
PG-13. It seems it would be much easier on Admirals if the rules were to head it off in specific terms before-hand. Nothing too graphic, but enough to be pretty cut-and-dried so that Admirals responding to complaints can just cut-and-paste the rule without having to quibble.
2) Also, I find it a little worrisome that the statement seems to prioritize the identity of the victim over actually addressing inappropriate behavior.
A bully doesn't need to know if I'm a teen or not, or even that I was offended - they need only know that saying, posting, or typing about
extreme violence, pornography, illegal drugs, threats to any person, or graphic sexual acts is inappropriate for our fleet.
-- I'm not saying we should have a wall of text like the
official STO forums do, or even necessarily spell it out in multiple bullet-points like the old rules did, but something that addresses what can't be said in a concrete manner is a little more enforceable than "don't do it if it'd embarrass your grandma."
Other than that nit-pickiness, it looks great!