Hey, I just played this tonight... I really enjoyed the mission to this point, and I'm excited to play the rest. I found the story compelling; I typically have a hard time immersing myself in the story of many player-made missions, but found myself intrigued in this one. I enjoyed how the story wasn't linear, in that I wasn't able to anticipate how the next portion of the story would unfold, until I experienced it.
There were a few, minor spelling mistakes, but unfortunately, I didn't make note of where they were.
Having published a mission with gay content myself, I've had a few negative reviews on that basis too. I wouldn't worry too much about it, because you're bound to get a few.
Anyway, I had a good time playing this... I need to know what happens... soon! :) Good work!
Cheers,
Dave.